People's opinions differ as to whether it is beneficial to make teenagers engaged in part-time jobs. While there are some arguments to force students to work, I still believe it is not necessary to follow this trend.
There are several reasons why people might support the view of having students a part-time job. Firstly, Nowadays, it has become more challenging and difficult to earn money in a job. People want their children to gain experience ahead and become independent. Secondly, Many higher studies demand a prior work experience. Courses like MBA hire students who already have worked in a job. Thus it becomes mandatory for students to work before applying for higher studies. Lastly, it supports their financial condition. While working students can pay their tuition fees, Parents do not need to spend on their savings.
In spite of the above arguments, I support the opinion that students should not be forced to work while studying. First of all, Students are already under so much pressure due to studies. They are expected to do well in the exam and get good grades. If they will be engaged in some work as well then it will become difficult for them to focus on their studies. Moreover, they will not get enough time to play or meet friends. For instance, they will be spending most of the time in studies and the remaining time on the job thus no time for fun. As a result, this might lead to more stress and no relaxation. Furthermore, for creativity and brain development, it is important for a student to involve in some sports.
In conclusion, students are motivated to involve in a part-time job, I believe that the drawbacks of this trend outweigh the advantages in a long term.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion:
...do not need to spend on their savings. In spite of the above arguments, I suppo...
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Suggestion: as
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81016949153 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59032739931 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545762711864 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0128883462 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.6842105263 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5263157895 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42105263158 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15312816367 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492486454434 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486894261287 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110765346253 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312981524428 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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