People's opinions differ on whether it is beneficial to make teenagers engaged in a part-time job. While there are some arguments to force students to work, I still believe it is not necessary to follow this trend.
There are several reasons why people might support the view of having students a job. Firstly, Nowadays, it has become more challenging to earn money in a job. Due to high competition, it demands more experience along with skill set. Consequently, People want their children to gain experience ahead and become independent. Secondly, Many higher studies demand a prior work experience. For example, Courses like MBA hire students who already have served in a job. Thus, it becomes mandatory for students to work before applying for higher studies. Lastly, it supports their financial condition. While working students can pay their tuition fees, Parents do not need to spend on their savings. For instance, poor people will look forward to their child to earn money as soon as possible so that they can improve there lives.
In spite of the above arguments, I support the opinion that students should not be forced to work while studying. First of all, Students are already under so much pressure due to studies. They are expected to do well in the exam and get good grades. If they will be engaged in some work then it will be difficult for them to focus on their studies. Moreover, they will not get enough time to play or meet friends. For instance, they will be spending most of the time in studies and the remaining time on the job thus no time for fun. As a result, this might lead to more stress and no relaxation. Furthermore, for creativity and brain development, it is important for a student to involve in some sports. Hence, it is not required to have them a job along with studies.
In conclusion, many nations encourage teens to participate in a part-time job, I believe that the drawbacks of this trend outweigh the advantages in a long term.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'earning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: earning
...owadays, it has become more challenging to earn money in a job. Due to high competition...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77842565598 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59817313062 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533527696793 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8881982775 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.5 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5909090909 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152502875864 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463545402409 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511106919689 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121133559748 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515777995277 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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