Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.
Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
It is often debated that, animal protection by zoos is beneficial to those which is endangered while, many people oppose to that because it has been detrimental effect on to the them and society. However, in my opinion, zoos must be protected by legislation over zoo and care of nearby people as well.
Animal protection has been inevitable because of the detrimental condition on animal lives inside and outside the forest. Increasing deforestation and industrialization escalated the extinction of many wild animals, which makes the degradation of wild affluence and heritage to the core. Taking care of such animals and introduce to the forthcoming generation to the benefits and importance and sort of pampering would lead to decline the situation become more worse. Moreover, zoos act as a kind of shelter for many species from the huntsman and their breeding process somehow overall well being. For instance, some kind of Gorilla which is protected in American zoo was reported only countable in fingers globally.
On the other hand, main opposes of wild protectors might be nearby community and modernist. Many community emerging the pernicious factors of zoo such as, the aggression on people by wild animals, destroying the local farms, and so on. Similarly, many argued that to protect human safety and security rather than animals should be the predominant matter on every government agenda. For example, recent news report from Indonesia that, crocodile attack on local people arises and agriculture destruction makes severe problems in their sustainable livelihood.
To sum up, in my perspective, wild animals often makes harmful hazards over to the society, nevertheless, it is an indispensable responsibility to protect these kind of animals under proper barriers which is not directly attack on to the people in near villages by the help of constitution.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'them'?
Suggestion: the; them
...se it has been detrimental effect on to the them and society. However, in my opinion, zo...
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Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worse' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worse
...ld lead to decline the situation become more worse. Moreover, zoos act as a kind of shelte...
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Line 7, column 156, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...indispensable responsibility to protect these kind of animals under proper barriers which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, moreover, nevertheless, similarly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, sort of, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32996632997 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95368151441 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7778385606 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.916666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1666666667 7.06120827912 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219853728083 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843897243118 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715075383843 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137326385489 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706468007458 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.