Some people feel that entertainers such as filmt stars, pop music and or sport stars are paid too much money
Do you agree or disagree
It is of some people's opinion that Actors, Athletes and Artists are over paid. In my opinion, I do not agree with this view because celebrities sacrifice a lot, they have short career span and make us happy.
First and foremost, entertainers practically dedicate their life to their work. They put a lot of hard work and practise into what they do so as to get a desirable feedback from critics and their audience by spending large amount of money enrolling in various kinds of academies to polish their weaknesses as well as spending hours in practise. They also deprive themselves from other pleasurable things to keep in shape or in form. For instance, an actor who is require to fit into a scripted role as a slim person has to avoid some of his cravings that could hinder them from fitting into that role. Furthermore, the risk of physical injury is high among certain types of celebrities. Actors are sometimes required to do or partake in a dangerous scene that could lead to loss of life while, a sportsman or woman could incur physical injuries. A good example was when Paul Walker died while shooting the blockbuster film "fast and furious 7" Also, a footballer from Senegal died on the field last year when playing soccer. While, a study conducted by a Nigerian doctor in the United States revealed that boxers suffer from Parkinson disease, a condition that causes loss of balance and coordination.
A second reason why celebrities deserve how highly they are paid is that they usually have a short career span usually between ten to fifteen years. This is as a result of having numerous upcoming artist, actors and pop stars who usurp the old ones thus, limiting the numbers of activities and roles that they can partake in. In contrast, other professionals like doctors, bankers, have longer career span than celebrities, between thirty to fifty years, doubling that of celebrities. It is only fair for celebrities to be highly paid for the limited number of years they have to spend on set.
Finally, movies, sports and music has been immeasurable beneficial to us because they give us pleasure and easy our stress by making us laugh as a result keeping us relaxed. A recent study conducted by the psychiatric department of university of Ibadan confirms that people who watch comedy and sport are not likely to suffer from depression because of the endorphins, hormone that makes us euphoric, is released when they watch these programs.
To sum up, entertainers basically sacrifice their life, work for a limited duration of years and keep us psychologically healthy hence, they should be appreciated for it by giving them large amount of money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
It is of some peoples opinion that Actors, Athletes and Artis...
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Line 4, column 140, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ard work and practise into what they do so as to get a desirable feedback from critics a...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
... in form. For instance, an actor who is require to fit into a scripted role as a slim p...
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Line 4, column 472, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fitting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: fitting
.... For instance, an actor who is require to fit into a scripted role as a slim person h...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople who watch comedy and sport are not likely to suffer from depression because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in contrast, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 454.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9140969163 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66724445425 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577092511013 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.8097657183 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.235294118 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7058823529 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0748284162111 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0266070800102 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034939938577 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0475340737117 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288277759958 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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