Advancement in medical science has led to increased average age of people, which is resulting in rise in number of older people as compared to younger. However, it seems to be a negative development.
To commence with, older people are more experienced and professional in their fields, so they are becoming an imperative part of companies. They can do work efficiently and with perfection due improvement in medical treatment so, older people are boon for employers. However, this trend has negative side as well. This is directly related to unemployment as companies are not giving jobs to untrained young worker, which eventually is elevating crime rate. To illustrate, a youngster without job due to shotage of money thinks to earn money by wrong ways. Hence, they are becoming violent and anti-social, evil part of
community.
Besides this, younger people are more fit and active, they can do work rapidly and have more innovative ideas. So, they can contribute more in development of a nation, for instance, a research has shown that after age of 50 mental ability start decreasing and brain works slowly as compared to earlier. Thus, appointing older workers will not be beneficial for owners. Furthermore, government will need to spend huge capital on their treatment, accommodation and food as all older people cannot work. This can upset financial balance of a country, neglecting other essential issues, this will become their priorty. Deducing, this trend's negative points are far more than positive.
In conclusion, as I aforementioned older people have momentous role in society. They provide ethical and moral values to the younger generation. But, their increased proportion will have adverse effects, disturbing balance which nature has created.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33571428571 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86427680797 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614285714286 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.471508712 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8823529412 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4705882353 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2442565825 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758167137562 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517182515984 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157098282595 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541682779751 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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