Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Recently, the phenomenon of the consequences of working for the students while they are studying and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that working while the education period is highly damaging to students, such an issue is regarded thoroughly constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that the results of working for students can be a disadvantage, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
To begin with, there are various reasons to dismiss working in education period. At first, working could prepare students for their future life especially if it is related to their career. However, it can bring many disadvantages for them like the lack of time for their studies. For example, students who work during the education have usually lower grades than other classmates.
In addition, the incomes of working are helpful for the students' finances and beneficial to live easier. But it can force them under the many of pressures such as over exhausted in class times and mental pressures. The solution for these situations is the scholarship from the governments.
In conclusion, while there are several compelling arguments on this statements, I profoundly believe that despite all the advantages of working for the students, the drawbacks for their living and health is far outweighed its benefits.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 1207.87684729 96% => OK
No of words: 221.0 242.827586207 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25791855204 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.92707691288 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92069443273 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 139.433497537 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601809954751 0.580463131201 104% => OK
syllable_count: 359.1 379.143842365 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.407103002 50.4703680194 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.636363636 104.977214359 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 20.9669160288 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.25397266985 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.33497536946 112% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 6.9802955665 43% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261442899977 0.242375264174 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1007483281 0.0925447433944 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035960699465 0.071462118173 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156880651163 0.151781067708 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272029695232 0.0609392437508 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 12.6369458128 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.1260098522 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 11.5310837438 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 55.0591133005 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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