TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology is a huge area and generalizing technology is just not the right things to do. Technologies acquire to a huge chunk of our lives and influence our lifestyle in many ways, like in our daily communication by a car or might be connecting our loved ones with social networking or education or in health sciences. In my opinion, technologies made our generation and the next generation more creative than the previous ones.
First of all, what kind of technologies do children use? First in case of education, in modern days many online education applications are here to help children with studies and some of them are really influential and help student to understand the subject and they can learn all those without attending a private tuition. Internet helps them to study and through social networking or with video calling students can contact their respective teacher or their friends to asking their help for studying.
The next positive effect of technology on our life is health sciences. Health sciences recently improved a lot and scientist acquire a lot of antivirus with the help of technology. The next is our transportation and engineering. We recently developed hyperloop and that just helps peoples to commute more quickly and efficiently and also we develop electric car like Tesla. This kind of technologies not just only increase job markets but also help influence other to invent new thing and be creative in their life. When it came down to software technologies we cannot ignore how smartphone and computers change of lives. And out of many three companies come into my mind, Microsoft, Google, and Facebook. These three giants are the product of our technology evaluation. These companies not only creates direct job but also creates more side business and influence other to start a startup. The companies like Amazon or Flipkart changes the consumer markets forever and now shopkeepers now directly sell their items to these online markets instead of selling direct o the open market, which is profitable to them.
Technologies help farmers by improving the different scientific way of cultivation and improving biological fertilizer and improving the water channels to the land. In the space science, we developed in a diverse way, life satellite which helps us in GPS or in surveying some land. Now we can see the universe and NASA developed a probe that can capture the sun's photo and helps us to understand better the sun. Our renewable energy industry developed in recent years and now we can use sunlight, water energy or wind power to produce electricity.
Now some people argue by pointing out the dark side of technologies like consumer products like electronic hazards and the chance of nuclear wars. They would say that everyone now creating robots and Artificial Intelligence, that take our jobs and harm our life. I would say that, for the first point for consumer products, some countries use the post-consumer products to produce electricity and we can hope that other countries quickly adopt that idea too, this industry growing quickly and many peoples invest their money on it. The next point, nuclear also helps us to produce electricity but also in medicine.
The artificial intelligence is need in some cases like in driving; an artificial intelligence can save a human life by preventing accidents or in some cases in space exploration A.I. helps instead of sending a human.
In the conclusion, I would say that by pointing out only dark side of technology or thinking that technology gulp down our jobs and made us less creative is just a typical old and rigorous thinking and trying to attenuate the power of technology.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, kind of, first of all, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 44.0 13.8261648746 318% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3083.0 1977.66487455 156% => OK
No of words: 610.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05409836066 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96972615649 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80185036951 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46393442623 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 971.1 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9311875814 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.576923077 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26923076923 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0918733378367 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304613863426 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031589625032 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0527576361316 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376640145001 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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