Some people said that giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effects, to what extend do you agree or disagree ?

The poorer countries received donations from the richer. That is a good sign to let people share what they have with the poorer. However, there are some pros and cons about this situation.

First of all, those people always receive from the other that will make them become more depending on another. If we keep give money to the poor without a specific solving problem method that to help them use the money efficiently to improve their life such as investing in education, medication, life-related changes; our money will become useless. Because they just use the money to solve the surface problem but not the root.

In the other hand, if the richer gives aid to the poorer via investing on build the schools, those will help the poor children are able to go to school, the knowledge which they learn from school will be a priceless treasure for their future. They can contribute and improve their countries by themselves. That is a long-time positive interest. Moreover, the money can be used to build the hospitals at the poor countries, which will help them live longer, avoid illness. As people said, the healthier lives a happier life. By building more hospital, the poor is able to receive the treatment on time and help them live longer. This is really good for them. The last one, instead of giving money, sponsoring for the good students to study oversea is a positive thing too. Just making sure those people will come back after they graduate, so they are able to help their countries by using the enormous knowledge which they learned from modern countries. This method also helps the undeveloped countries becomes richer.

In conclusion, giving money to solve the immediate problem such is starving, so the poorer needs food right away is okay. More than that, we should help them to change their life is a better choice.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to use' or 'use'.
Suggestion: to use; use
...olving problem method that to help them using our money efficiently to improve their ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... improve their countries by themselves. Thats a long-time positive effect. Moreove...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l help them live longer, avoid illness. As people said the healthier live a happie...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o change their life is a better choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89137380192 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34316244247 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539936102236 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.497933849 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0555555556 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152550396525 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568501739936 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380549847689 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908897351029 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424526284429 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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