By and large, it is established beyond doubt that every society has its own rules which individuals have to follow them. In this regard, the rules that the government expects young people to pursue is of paramount importance. There has been no shortage of debates among scholars on whether it is beneficial that these rules should be easy to follow with high freedom or they should be strict. As for this writer’s opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In what follow. I will elaborate on the most crucial reasons.
The first reason is that young people are not enough mature to follow by themselves. It is crystal clear that youth are the most vulnerable people in the society who can affect readily by the exterior surrounding. It goes without saying that due to the rise of social media, young people are more exposed to the surrounding area and they can see the rules and behaviors of other societies. As a result, they try to imitate them in their society which may conflict with their society’s rules. If the rules are easy to follow or easy to restrict more young people behave as they want or as they learn from other societies. Therefore, the more tough rules adopt for young people, the fewer conflicts would occur in the society.
Furthermore, young people can better realize the importance of the rules. Had everyone known the consequences o their behaviors the society would have been the better place to live. By way of illustration, in our society, the rules of driving are so strict for people, especially young ones and they do not be allowed to drive until the age of 18 despite some other countries. This rule brings this meant for me that driving is so important; because it may have harmful consequences for people and myself. As this example clears, only when the government adopts tough rules for driving, do the young people realize that they should follow it, carefully.
To put it briefly, as I mentioned above, one can infer that the rules adopted for young people should be strict. There is a couple of points which are worth to restating: firstly, young people are less able to recognize how to behave in the society due to raw personality; secondly, they can understand how much the rules are crucial when they are so tough to follow. As for this writer’s advice, I highly urge societies to care more and more about the rules they adopt for young people.
- Some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while others think realistic goals are more important. Which do you prefer and why? 60
- If there’s a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you would take?1. take more exercise2. eat healthy food3. reduce the amount of stress 60
- TPO 30 Integrated Writing Task 87
- TPO 39 Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure successful future Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 80
- TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task 76
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75837320574 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52852253374 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7241481322 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.45 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251305527441 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922780191726 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470403779123 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181694368041 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183068809352 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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