College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
To earn money, to get a job is the one of the most important things to do in one of human’s life as we need to earn money at least to sustain our lives. Thus, we may consider which job to get, in a prospective perspective, as College is one of the deciding factors to get a job, we may consider which discipline we want to study, which field we want to enter before we get a job. Moreover, we may consider which field is most prospective when we are deciding which field we must enter. Thus, some might argue that we need to see the availability of job in that field, for college students, to decide which field that those students want to participate in. However, I contend that college students should not decide their field of majoring only dependent on job availability as there are many other factors that decides job market.
Some may argue that it is wise to think about the future job market when deciding current job market situation. However, that may be true but not be true when we think about job market situation from some time ago. First, we have to assert that we, at current time, do not know any knowledge about the future, and current situation has not many meanings about the future, as future always changes. For example, we did not know that artificial intelligence will be very lucrative and prominent field before even 5years ago. Most of us did not know anything about deep learning in artificial intelligence. Most of us, however, thought that computer may do something in the future, but we did not know exactly what we will expect for.
So, as we do not know what will happen in the future. Although we may think that we know much about the future and ourselves, we do not know about them. It is the same for the college students, they do not know anything about the future. Future may change. For instance, some time ago there was some time when we needed to have telephone operators when we call to long-range phone calls. At that time, some people might think that to have a job, which equals to have an experience in that field that might seem promising as we all needed such operator to have a phone call. However, that is no longer needed as we had an advance in technology which supplants that job position.
To argue as a hole, we do not know about the future, and the future may change drastically, and that is supported by the history. For college students, as we do not know about the future, they must decide which field they want to study as we do not know that will be the future.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. the second argument is duplicated to the argument one.
2. need at least 3 arguments.
3. the introduction is too long. follow essays by this user whose introductions for essays are pretty short:
http://www.testbig.com/users/sauvikb
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So how to make more arguments?
For GRE issue essays, better always support/against one side. We may consider TLPE:
T means Time: put the argument on a time frame to check out it is correct or not. For example, we may say: it works today, it may not work on future. Your argument one is fine.
L means Location: test the argument on different locations/countries/regions. For example, we may say: the job position works on location(country, region...) A, it may not work on location(country, region...) B.
P means People: test the argument on people. for example, the job works on people A, it may not work on people B. or people may not like the job.
E means Event: for example, it works on event (occasion, context...) A, it may not work on it works on event (occasion, context...) B. like: technical revolution.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2002 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.305 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.275 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.224 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.437 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.429 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...tors that decides job market. Some may argue that it is wise to think about the futu...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 732, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t know exactly what we will expect for. So, as we do not know what will happen in the ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, at least, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 33.0 11.3162921348 292% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44731182796 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38723238983 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.374193548387 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7816648936 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14768112232 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624484365451 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685131339144 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105497366684 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065886944865 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.