Some people say that self employment is better than a job in company or an institution. Discuss , what is your opinion ? Give reasons to support your answer .

Submitted by Arsh12 on Thu, 10/04/2018 - 13:16

In modren day every person well educational provider as well as any person want work.some mases prefer to self employment and some people better than working for companies institution as it give a degree of outonom to the person and is not carecive . I will discuss both view and my point of view in the upcoming paragraph

To begin with self employment is better work becouse. There is full freedom in their work. self employment is very easy to doing any work for better under for any companies. owner does not doing any process .becouse, any doing work servant. self emploment with increse profit take by owner . furthermore owner does not getup early in the morning . slf employment offers many benifets . the main advantages is that one choose the type of work avvording yo own intrest . selfemplooyment apply any policeies in company

On the other hand , some people say that under for companies are doing work better . they take their workpaid no loss of profit matters . there are doing work in companies the can enjoy holidays . Moreover, work improve their skills by boind job in company. they can worker more doing work in company taking bonous

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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In modren day every person well educational provider as well as any pers...
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...ucational provider as well as any person want work.some mases prefer to self empl...
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...utonom to the person and is not carecive . I will discuss both view and my point o...
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Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Self
...e. There is full freedom in their work. self employment is very easy to doing any w...
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...their work. self employment is very easy to doing any work for better under for a...
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Suggestion: Owner
...ork for better under for any companies. owner does not doing any process .becouse, an...
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...under for any companies. owner does not doing any process .becouse, any doing work se...
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...panies. owner does not doing any process .becouse, any doing work servant. self em...
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Suggestion: Self
...ocess .becouse, any doing work servant. self emploment with increse profit take by o...
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...loment with increse profit take by owner . furthermore owner does not getup early ...
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...ent with increse profit take by owner . furthermore owner does not getup early in the morni...
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...ent with increse profit take by owner . furthermore owner does not getup early in the morni...
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Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...wner does not getup early in the morning . slf employment offers many benifets . t...
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...r does not getup early in the morning . slf employment offers many benifets . the m...
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...ng . slf employment offers many benifets . the main advantages is that one choose ...
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.... slf employment offers many benifets . the main advantages is that one choose the ...
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...he type of work avvording yo own intrest . selfemplooyment apply any policeies in ...
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Suggestion: Selfemplooyment
...type of work avvording yo own intrest . selfemplooyment apply any policeies in company On th...
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...oliceies in company On the other hand , some people say that under for companie...
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...nder for companies are doing work better . they take their workpaid no loss of pro...
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...r for companies are doing work better . they take their workpaid no loss of profit m...
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Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...their workpaid no loss of profit matters
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, well, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 1615.20841683 50% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 166.0 315.596192385 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87951807229 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 4.20363070211 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54219626893 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 176.041082164 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620481927711 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 506.74238477 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.6305708014 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6363636364 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0909090909 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.01903807615 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169387546613 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576818400525 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065176122635 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129885466487 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295924073079 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 78.4519038076 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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