TPO 53 Integrated Writing Tasks

The author is providing some evidence to support her claim about the advantages of taxes applied to cigarettes and unhealthy food. However, the lecturer casts doubt on all the ideas mentioned by the author and refute them all.

Firstly, Although the author asserts that these taxes will discourage people from buying cigarettes or similarly, unhealthy food, the lecturer is not convinced and believes that it is not worth the consequences. The passage states that people will consume fewer cigarettes and unhealthy food because of the higher prices, which leads to a healthier society. On the contrary, the lecturer highlights the fact that, the taxes cannot affect people's tendency to buy cigarettes or unhealthy products, and they will only start to consume the ones with lower quality. Hence, in the long-term an unhealthier society is expected.

Furthermore, the author believes that not all the community should pay for covering the costs caused by unhealthy habits like smoking. Therefore, the smokers should pay these taxes and afford their medical costs themselves. In contrast, the lecturer makes this clear by pointing to the class differences in the society. It is obviously hard for a low-earning person to pay high taxes and will not be fair to them if wealthy people are paying the same. Thus, these taxes will create new financial issues for poor people who are addicted to cigarettes or unhealthy food.

Finally, the author mentions that these taxes as a new revenue for the government can be used to provide the budget of the projects that will benefit the public. Conversely, the author opposes this view by pointing to the adverse effects of the taxes on the government's behavior. She believes that the government will rely on these incomes and will not strive to find a fundamental solution to eradicate these harmful habits.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...the adverse effects of the taxes on the governments behavior. She believes that the governm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14900662252 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6154266495 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529801324503 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3442457268 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.071428571 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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flaws:
No. of Words: 302 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 302 250
No. of Characters: 1514 1200
No. of Different Words: 158 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.013 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.54 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.652 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4