It is a highly debated issue whether or not the essential for the youths to plan and organized to succeed in the future life. And due to the complexity of this opinion, I will discuss it from different angles. Personally, I agree entirely that younger peoples have to plan and organize every single detail in their daily life to be successful in the future.
First, the early planning, I mean from childhood, make the adulthood more succeed. Take my self as an example, when I was a little girl, I help my mother in their daily domestic activities in exchange for a sum of dollars, and I saved that money to buy school or personal stuff, I realized that my mom taught me not only to be financially successful in the future but, also who to manage my time between studying and assisting other people in the society. Because putting myself in the frames help me to improve the resilience and persistence in the daily performance. And because of this early experience, right now I am a successful woman in my personal and work life.
Second, "early education like carving on the rock" that means when someone tries to educate his sone about something, he is actually trying to install moral or behavior obligations. For instance, I have three kids, and every day I talk to my sons even the little one who they have to treat another person. I mean they have to respect their teachers and the elderly peoples and help them when they cross the street or when they were carrying heavy objects. I Find out that my older son teaches his brother now all the norms, that I taught him. SO, I don't worry about their future because they learn from the past who to react with the surrounding peoples. And these traits are crucially important for everyone who strives to succeed in the future so they will not forget that and teach their son in the future.
As a conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I firmly concur that planning and teaching in the past are the perfect tools to be a successful person in the future.
- Tpo 22 71
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- TOEFL TPO 20 - Integrated Writing Task 67
- Tpo 43 3
- Do you agree or did agree with following statement successful job needs good relations with people more than studying hard? 57
Essay evaluation report
whether or not the essential for the youths to plan and organized to succeed in the future life.
whether or not it is essential for the youths to plan and organize to succeed in the future life.
Because putting myself in the frames help me to improve the resilience and persistence in the daily performance.
putting myself in the frames helps (or helped) me to improve the resilience and persistence in the daily performance.
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flaws:
the examples are out of topic. It is about 'young people', but all examples are about little girl or small kids.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1615 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.437 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.386 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.528 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
It is a highly debated issue whether or not the essential for the youths to plan an...
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Line 2, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...inancially successful in the future but, also who to manage my time between study...
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Line 3, column 558, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ow all the norms, that I taught him. SO, I dont worry about their future because ...
^^
Line 3, column 562, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ll the norms, that I taught him. SO, I dont worry about their future because they l...
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Line 3, column 823, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that and teach their son in the future. As a conclusion, based on the arguments ...
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Line 4, column 175, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o be a successful person in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, for instance, i mean
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60055096419 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51432010373 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539944903581 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.3398377415 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.285714286 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12174234565 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458419888895 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425060479141 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799403284536 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599315611502 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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