Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number sports facilities. Others however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measurements are required.
Discuss both these view and give your opinion.
Nowadays public health has become as a controversial issue among the society. Some people reckon that, by growing the sport facilities, public health will be enhanced. Although sport facilities may be a good opportunity, I think it is better to consider the more adequate measures.
Sport facilities is one of the most impressive manner which could be used to refine the public health. In fact, with increasing the accessibility of sport devices, people probable will be motivated to do exercise. Why, costs of sport facilities is one of the main deterrent for people. In addition the volume of time that people should be spend on commute is other obstacle to do exercise. In other word, if people were able to afford this expenditure, they would be desire to do physical activities. For example it is possible to spread the sport facilities all around the local parks, this action may stimulate people to involve in regular exercise, why they do not have to pay any money or time for sport.
On the other hand, I suppose, better proceedings should be applied to improve the public health, why sport facilities lonely, not only is not able to refine public but also could cause the musculoskeletal damage, if people are not educated for using appropriately. So that, I think firstly, we should develop the level of health public among the society, in fact firstly, people should feel that they need to increase their health level. Then, we should lead society to prevent again unhealthy activity, in fact whit making culture, populace will be aware of better lifestyle. In other word with institutionalizing the healthy activity in culture of society, public health will be improved.
In conclusion I could infer, although sport facilities could be a good way for improving the public health, it is not enough especially lonely. In other word we should apply supplementary proceedings to refine the public health such as modifying the culture of society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, then, for example, i suppose, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06153846154 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7966945832 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507692307692 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5026823067 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.666666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46666666667 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272618910035 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111026575355 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625074757411 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194875613527 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165903262905 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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