It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Some of people think children has great oppurtinity if they are choosing same jobs with their parents. Becuase they defens to it is great for getting knowledge about a job. Others think that children are not choosing same job with thier parents. According to them children never have great think with a job. In my opinion children can choose parents' job beacuse they had already known very valueable specialities about any jobs. In the other words I agree with following statement and I am going to explain why I agree with in several reasons.
Children the most important things for their parents in the world. In this reason parents always want to thier children to be perfect. Under the this definition if a child had decided to do same job with parents, it would beneficial to him or her. Beacuse a child do not have to search any job when he or she will been graduated form a high school or an university. In other words, children are be able to find job directly when they will graduated form any level of education. For example, when I was a student at high school I had many friends one of my friends had worked with their father in a small company instead of they finished high school. This company was related with cars and my friends had great experiences about cars and thier engines. He had been learning great things about car even he only worked with his father. In this reason even a child did not graduate from university he or she has a chance find a job if they are choose same jobs with their parents.
Other reasons why I consider that children should choose same jobs with parents is given great knowledge about market. In other explaination for instance, I remember to when I was a student at university I really interested in politics and international relations. I had a friend which is student an university and she had choosed to Political Sciences department at university. When asked to her why you were choose that department, she told me I had choosed that department beacuse my father had been working for government at that time.We never cut our relationship we are meeting sometimes with her. She has found great job in Minister of Foregin Affairs beacuse of her father.As she got the chance working in there,she was taken great referans by her father.
In the conclusion,children should choose a job which is same with their parents' job for these reasons. A child has huge oppurtinity in terms of find a job and he or she get great experiences about any job. If I had to chanced to worked same job with my father, I would prefered to work same job beacuse of mentioned reasons.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the people') or simply say ''Some people''.
Suggestion: Some of the people; Some people
Some of people think children has great oppurtinity if...
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Line 1, column 264, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ob with thier parents. According to them children never have great think with a j...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
... to thier children to be perfect. Under the this definition if a child had decided to do...
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Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[4]
Message: Did you mean 'will be' or 'has been'?
Suggestion: will be; has been
...t have to search any job when he or she will been graduated form a high school or an univ...
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ll been graduated form a high school or an university. In other words, children ar...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...niversity. In other words, children are be able to find job directly when they wil...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'graduate'
Suggestion: graduate
...ble to find job directly when they will graduated form any level of education. For exampl...
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Line 3, column 942, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'chosen'.
Suggestion: chosen
...she has a chance find a job if they are choose same jobs with their parents. Other...
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Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ations. I had a friend which is student an university and she had choosed to Polit...
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Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'chosen'.
Suggestion: chosen
...versity. When asked to her why you were choose that department, she told me I had choo...
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Suggestion: We
...een working for government at that time.We never cut our relationship we are meeti...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...f Foregin Affairs beacuse of her father.As she got the chance working in there,she...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , she
...r.As she got the chance working in there,she was taken great referans by her father....
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Line 7, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , children
...ans by her father. In the conclusion,children should choose a job which is same with ...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...ty in terms of find a job and he or she get great experiences about any job. If I h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so, for example, for instance, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62660944206 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59156756408 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405579399142 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.288382111 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7391304348 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2608695652 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13043478261 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336490555014 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140976020345 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113830495792 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272960888146 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936255341995 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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