Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Nowadays people are interested on the life of celebrities more than any other time, people want to know everything about celebrities- such as movie stars or famous sports celebrities. However, most people wonder whether those celebrities gain more benefits or problem out of their fame. In following I will discuss this issue and furnish my own idea.
To begin with, let see what benefits being a celebrity can bring along. Firstly, people love to be known by other people, therefore, the first benefit is the joy of fame. Secondly, people mostly respect celebrities and famous persons, hence, they...
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