Extreme sport has been a controversial story of whether it should be maintained or not. While many social residents support its prohibition, it seems to me that providing citizens with freedom of sport they opt for is more suitable.
On the one hand, people against dangerous sports justified that they should be banned due to their negative impacts in economic and health respects. Firstly, the expense of doing extreme vehicle sports is exorbitant, but not many of them reflect the Olympic ideal and have been approved to appear at major sporting events. Thus, eliminating games being not beneficial for the nation’s sport, and even economically detrimental could be deemed as a reasonable policy. Moreover, sports like bungee jumping or kayaking require a high level of strength, making players exert themselves and, therefore, having a high probability of injury. Hence, if the authority imposed an official ban on them, it would be an effective solution to preventing citizens from venturing their physical health on risky pastime.
On the other hand, I believe that extreme sports should be treated equally to spectator sports in terms of their possibility to be freely chosen. Indeed, people playing dangerous sports are not really insecure, safe in the knowledge that before participating, they have taken sensible precautions, such as fully equipping themselves with essential sport gears. Such measures, which are effective to avoid life-threatening conditions, make the policy of banning extreme sports on safety grounds unconvincing. Additionally, it is reasoned that when an injury occurred, the players themselves, not the authority, are hold accountable for their recovery. Therefore, if extreme sport were outlawed, it could be seen as a personal freedom infringement, rather than a strategy to protect citizens’ health.
Briefly, I concur with the view that people should be free to do dangerous sports, provided that they abide by the safety rules.
- Many people think studying in university is a waste of time and money. They are supposed that young people should work for real experience. Do you agree or disagree? 84
- The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- New technology has changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? 89
- In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 84
- The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f sport they opt for is more suitable. On the one hand, people against dangerou...
^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eir physical health on risky pastime. On the other hand, I believe that extrem...
^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...egy to protect citizens' health. Briefly, I concur with the view that peo...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed that they abide by the safety rules.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47557003257 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96518577985 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625407166124 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5118048896 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 129.307692308 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209107361587 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798366495059 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061361765255 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151004900575 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415494186072 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.