The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by aidarqua on Sat, 11/03/2018 - 01:52

The chart demonstrates the proportion of Australian men and women in the different age groups who performed exercises in 2010.

It is clear that the percentage of females who did the physical activity outweighed the percentage of males in almost all of the age groups. The percentage was changed from 47.1 in the age group 65 years and over to 53.3 in the interval of ages from 45 years to 54.

On the other hand, in the age group from 15 to 24 the percentage of men was 52.8 that outweighed the proportion of women. Furthermore, despite the majority of females who did the permanent physical activity in the group where people's age is at least 65, the proportions were approximately equal and the differences were just in 0.4%.

Overall, the percentages of both genders were sharply changed among all the age groups and just in the last group the differences were marginal

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, at least, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 730.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77124183007 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75889777591 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496732026144 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 220.5 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.976693748 43.030603864 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.666666667 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.23603664747 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322669019145 0.215688989381 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180883616652 0.103423049105 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769457450755 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218804171686 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749398564085 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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