Knowledge is the vital element of life and everyone agree with that it will build their path to success. However, many high school students not that happy with the number of lessons they taught in school because they think it is way too much for one children. From my point of view, having many different subjects to learn is beneficial for the student in both direct and indirect ways.
In the first place, the main work of high school is to provide their student with the basic information of every subject to make them a unique individual. Having a broad range of knowledge will probably encourage the students to improve themselves and give them an opportunity to know well about everything that exists in this universe. Moreover, even though all the subjects taught in high school will not used in the future for everyone, it all encourage their brain to work properly. For example, one of my teachers have a great interest in every subject including math, science, history, and even in geography. According to him, he only practice and restudy everything from his high school books and he has no difficulty in communicating with people who have a different majors because my teacher already has a basis on those subjects.
Furthermore, every subjects of high school help the students to find their real passion and what they really interested in. Without knowing even a little bit about everything, we cannot decide the future career, which is the most hard and crucial decision of life, of us. For example, I cannot really what to major in because it is really hard for me to choose between science and math that are the subject I am interested in the most. However, imagine that if I am not go to school, because I have to decide between about twenty subjects and have no idea when it comes to time to enter a college.
All in all, high school is not only dedicated to educate children, but it is also encourages the students to make their real life decisions. I think the pros of teaching many different subjects in high school outweigh the cons of it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one child', 'a child', or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: one child; a child; children
...cause they think it is way too much for one children. From my point of view, having many dif...
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Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...children. From my point of view, having many different subjects to learn is beneficial for the...
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Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...subjects taught in high school will not used in the future for everyone, it all enco...
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Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'practices'.
Suggestion: practices
...in geography. According to him, he only practice and restudy everything from his high sc...
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Line 3, column 776, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'major'?
Suggestion: major
...cating with people who have a different majors because my teacher already has a basis ...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...y interested in. Without knowing even a little bit about everything, we cannot decide the ...
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Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'gone'.
Suggestion: gone
...most. However, imagine that if I am not go to school, because I have to decide bet...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...decisions. I think the pros of teaching many different subjects in high school outweigh the co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, well, for example, i think, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70523415978 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47966327844 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501377410468 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.5854041466 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218516142903 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859106408032 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580555844577 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151997205904 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254279441674 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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