Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help other. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a part of society who is in position to serve others. Many people feel that the riches have the best opportunity to help others. In my opinion, I completely agree that rich people can help others by doing charity work and generating employment by doing local business.
Firstly, rich people can help the people in need by doing some charity work. It will provide them the basic necessities of life to live. Furthermore, with the help of charity they can extend their support to their family which will give a sense of accomplishment to them. For example, some kids who do not have access to education can get it with the help of charity. Therefore, charity will not only help people to improve their life but also motivate them to work hard.
In addition, rich people have the ability to do the almost any kind of business and doing business at local level will generate employment for the one’s who are in need of it. In other words, being employed will improve their overall lifestyle as well as encourage them to help further. Take construction of factory, for instance, it will generate numerous number of jobs during the construction phase but also after completion. Thus, business will help needy people to have a job but will also make rich people richer so they can help further.
In conclusion, rich people has the best chance of being able to help others which will give a sense of fulfillment to them and ultimately, make lives of other people better.
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Comments
Following are the reasons why
Following are the reasons why I feel that this is the case.
People who are rich should be involved in organization charities in order to help people who are poor because rich people can help the poor gain life's necessities. Charities around the world always search for people who need some help. For instance, there are several charities that attempt to support other people who don't have money, such as UNICEF and END Fund.
The rich people should help others to get an education. Some countries need education in order to decrease unemployment numbers, since providing that education can be a successful way to improve the countries. This can help unemployed people find jobs and improve their countries by being educated.
Doing business in poor areas is a good idea as there will be diminution in the rate of poor people because they can enhance other's lives and improve their countries by contributing to big business. Thus, this idea can decrease the number of poor in an area and all of them can have jobs instead.
In conclusion, organizing charities, offering education and initiating business with those who are poor are great opportunities for those who are rich to help the poor.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
... charity work. It will provide them the basic necessities of life to live. Furthermore, with the ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it. In other words, being employed will improve their overall lifestyle as well ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1229.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74517374517 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48492720719 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 387.9 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0518176754 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5384615385 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9230769231 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5384615385 7.06120827912 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190259796275 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825340042761 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06286180621 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140950280844 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035315716904 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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