The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement states that the best way for a society in preparation of its young population for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling them a sense of cooperation and not competion. However, sometimes competition is also crucial because when competing with someone we tend to give our 100 percent. I srongly agree with the speaker's claim. My proclivity towards the same has been explained along with relevant examples in the ensuing paragraghs.
The primary reason as why cooperation is better than competition is a simple notion that 2 minds are better than 1. For example if 100 workers are working in a industry and some fault occurs in the machine while production, instead of one person trying to find the solution to the problem it will be better if all the 100 workers used their brains to tackle that particular problem in the machine. It will result in an increase in efficiency. Another example I would like to give that if suppose a meeting is being held at a company, then cooperation is must because the members of the meeting do not cooperate, it will lead to difference in opinion and thus no action will take place.
The second reason as to why cooperation is prefered than competition in mainly because leadership comes by acting together, working together not single handedly approaching a issue. People will choose a leader that listens to them and cooperates, they will not choose some one who is arrogant and haughty.
But, there may be some cases where competition is necessary. For example, it is natural that no human likes to lose a battle or competition, every one wants to win, to be the champion. So competition motivates people in giving their 100 percent effort.
To sum it all, I strongly agree with the speaker's claim. Cooperation is the best way to prapare the young people for leadership in goverment, industry and many other fields.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 54
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 62
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, thus, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 324.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9012345679 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76345415376 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552469135802 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8900243727 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.866666667 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264148449024 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849250149885 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.182554955263 0.0758088955206 241% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153546569923 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129011971509 0.0667264976115 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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