People financially and psychologically rely on their jobs to secure their future. Time passing, careers have experienced tremendous changes. On one hand, there is a group who believe that nowadays finding a proper job which guarantees your future and assures you that there will not be any lost, is challenging. On the other hand, there is another group who consider it as an exaggeration and apparently, hold the opposite view of point. Admittedly, based on my observations I agree with the former attitude toward the issue. People have numerous explicit reasons regarding to the argument and I would explore some which are conspicuous for me.
To begin with, nowadays, fast pace of world changing has brought innumerable jobs to the existence. You have many possible jobs to choose that deciding among them is very arduous work. Considering that you have variety of interests and gifts, you may have got interested in different jobs which all emerged during last decade, no one, however, is aware about their prospect. Keeping that in mind that money is not always the case when you choose a job, you may find a high-paid job too boring in the future. For example, once I have got interested in website developing and the other time in digital photo editing which are among new emerged jobs and both well-paid. Accordingly, in separate times, I started to work in both career which turned to be very exhausting and boring for me. Anyone around me did not have any experience and knowledge about the careers and so they could not consult me. After short time, I needed to change my both careers. So as you can see, numerous jobs do not guarantee your success.
Furthermore, job prospects are vague because of the emerging of technology. You see all around the new technologies based on programming, neural network, artificial intelligence and robotic which are going to take the place of people in doing tasks. For instance, there is a new Iranian application, termly “Snap” which is similar to “Uber” in USA. People were used to call taxi agencies to transport in a city. Currently, they all have installed the application on their smartphones and use it to find a geographically close taxi to take them to their destination. We cannot undermine the application though, because it facilitates commuting for us. However, it has caused elimination of some jobs like taxi agency managers. According to that, now if someone chooses to be a manager of taxi agency, he cannot be assured that he will have a stable job and subsequently, persistent income and flourishing prospect. There are also worries that same may happen for other jobs, too.
To conclude, careers future is not secure anymore not only in order to emerging innumerable jobs, but also for the developing technologies which are taking the place of people’s careers. Taking them into account, I would draw the conclusion that jobs prospects is getting worse and it needs us to have deeper look in the situation.
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- TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 90
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, apparently, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, well, for example, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2503.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99600798403 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87941291948 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5249500998 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8487853461 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2692307692 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2692307692 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88461538462 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127149556625 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381555903545 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338108910608 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824276213806 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348856452322 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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