According to the statement, the KICK radio station manager was inspired by a new kind of program which he want to add to the KICK's programs. It says that in another place Rockville ,there is another radio station called WCQP which added the number of call-in advice programs two years ago. It was proved this increasing worked locally because the fact that more audience were listening to the radio. Moreover the national survey showed that many audiences feel like this kind of programs. In my opinion, the KICK manager's idea sounds great while there are some facts I should reexamine carefull and point out the problems.
First of all, there is no obvious relevance mentioned by the author between the two radio stations , which means we do not know the conditon of the two stations. Whether they are comparable still troubles us.Maybe the WCQP is a news radio station which is professional at discussing topics with audiences meanwhile the KICK is popular with the music fans in Rock & Roll. Or to say there was just a host who was good at talk show join the WCQP ,and the audiences were favor of talking with him. I believe the manager should find out these facts to make futher descision.
Secondly, the diffrences between the two places and the nation obsecure us the conditons of local and nationwide. the author does not tell us the similarity between the two palces, Rockville and Medway, which is significant in the value of referrence. As there may be a vast difference between the two places. E.g. maybe the Rockville is full of factory workers who are not busy after work and eager to talk with sombody else , the DJ of the radio station is a wise choice. On ther other hand , the Medway could be a high technology city where people who like radio programs listen to them only on the way they drive to work.
I believe the manager also need to compare the main audiences somposition of KICK. likewise, the national survey shows the people all over the country feel like the call-in advice programs, but this kind of survey is much more general which can not represent local situation, so the survey has no value of referrence too unless the KICK is a Internet radio the author does not tell us ,however.
Thirdly ,the time and the development of the two radio stations. Because it was two years ago that the WCQP added the new programs, we don't know whether the audiences still like them now, as the situation is developing , no one will make warrant that this kind of program will also get praised by the audiences of KICK.
In conclusion, before the KICK manager make descision, he should make wide survey to find out the fact whtether the program is available in the radio station.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In my opinion, the KICK manager's idea sounds great while there are some facts I should reexamine carefull and point out the problems.
Error: carefull Suggestion: careful
Sentence: First of all, there is no obvious relevance mentioned by the author between the two radio stations , which means we do not know the conditon of the two stations.
Error: conditon Suggestion: condition
Sentence: Whether they are comparable still troubles us.Maybe the WCQP is a news radio station which is professional at discussing topics with audiences meanwhile the KICK is popular with the music fans in Rock & Roll.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: I believe the manager should find out these facts to make futher descision.
Error: descision Suggestion: decision
Error: futher Suggestion: father
Sentence: Secondly, the diffrences between the two places and the nation obsecure us the conditons of local and nationwide. the author does not tell us the similarity between the two palces, Rockville and Medway, which is significant in the value of referrence.
Error: referrence Suggestion: reference
Error: obsecure Suggestion: obscure
Error: diffrences Suggestion: differences
Error: conditons Suggestion: conditions
Error: palces Suggestion: places
Sentence: E.g. maybe the Rockville is full of factory workers who are not busy after work and eager to talk with sombody else , the DJ of the radio station is a wise choice.
Error: sombody Suggestion: somebody
Sentence: On ther other hand , the Medway could be a high technology city where people who like radio programs listen to them only on the way they drive to work.
Error: ther Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: I believe the manager also need to compare the main audiences somposition of KICK. likewise, the national survey shows the people all over the country feel like the call-in advice programs, but this kind of survey is much more general which can not represent local situation, so the survey has no value of referrence too unless the KICK is a Internet radio the author does not tell us ,however.
Error: referrence Suggestion: reference
Error: somposition Suggestion: composition
Error: call-in Suggestion: calling
Sentence: In conclusion, before the KICK manager make descision, he should make wide survey to find out the fact whtether the program is available in the radio station.
Error: whtether Suggestion: whether
Error: descision Suggestion: decision
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 477 350
No. of Characters: 2173 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.673 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.556 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.301 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.264 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...pired by a new kind of program which he want to add to the KICKs programs. It says t...
^^^^
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... It says that in another place Rockville ,there is another radio station called WC...
^^
Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...e audience were listening to the radio. Moreover the national survey showed that many au...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 599, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me facts I should reexamine carefull and point out the problems. First of all,...
^^
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he author between the two radio stations , which means we do not know the conditon...
^^
Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... know the conditon of the two stations. Whether they are comparable still troubles us.M...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maybe
...r they are comparable still troubles us.Maybe the WCQP is a news radio station which ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... who was good at talk show join the WCQP ,and the audiences were favor of talking ...
^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... the conditons of local and nationwide. the author does not tell us the similarity ...
^^^
Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...significant in the value of referrence. As there may be a vast difference between ...
^^
Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...work and eager to talk with sombody else , the DJ of the radio station is a wise c...
^^
Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ion is a wise choice. On ther other hand , the Medway could be a high technology c...
^^
Line 6, column 83, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Likewise
...the main audiences somposition of KICK. likewise, the national survey shows the people a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 340, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ue of referrence too unless the KICK is a Internet radio the author does not tell...
^
Line 6, column 384, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ternet radio the author does not tell us ,however. Thirdly ,the time and the de...
^^
Line 8, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...or does not tell us ,however. Thirdly ,the time and the development of the two ...
^^
Line 8, column 136, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...hat the WCQP added the new programs, we dont know whether the audiences still like t...
^^^^
Line 8, column 219, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...them now, as the situation is developing , no one will make warrant that this kind...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., first, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 475.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70105263158 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39189077783 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494736842105 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1310829468 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.526315789 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 5.70786347227 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272282752552 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862833542736 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792928196876 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142034237407 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698913712359 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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