The children are the future of our society, we were all young kids before. We may discover some children among us even ourselves gifted at some special area, then they made successful achivements or faded away. Here we wondered what happened on both of them while the responsiblilities of the society take on those kids.Some asserted the society should discern them and train them at their specialties. While I believe this would not be a good choice both for the gifted children and the society.
First of all, I would like to address that who plays the role of identifying them. I believe the parents , rather than the society should be the one to find out the children's talents, because the parents understand their kids mostly. The society , on the other hands, is composed by the people as general strangers to the gifted kids, who can not discern the distinguished part of a certain area on a child, compared with his father and mother.
Secondly, sometimes, the talented children would find the specialty by themselves without other's observations, even the other's judgement could be wrong at times.Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison all struggled to make success by themselves without the focus of other's when they were young ,who almost disecerned as stupid ones by the primary teachers. Later they got illuminated at their own areas no matter the Eistein still liked to eat ice creams , the famous picuture left to us.
Thirdly,cerntainly the society should provide the place to train the talented chilidren without concerntration on some of the children. To be gifted is the most admirefull thing to ones' parents and also benifiting the society. What the society should focus is to keep them talented and developing this specialty. The trainning place for specialty shoule welcome all the kids no matter how excellent or normal they are which also represent equal to all the kids. In addition , no one could predict the what will a little kid do in the future, Zuckerberg would not be congsidered as the most sucessful social network website CEO when he was young while the talents of his specialty on computers was discovered. So keeping them to be excellent is key to a society by the measure of providing palces like university to cultivate them.They will benefit the society in their certain ways.
In conclusion, the children, parents and society should find the role of their own on the matter of finding and trainning talents.For kids, keep calm and study well; for the parents, find out the kid's talents; for the society ,provide the place to cultivate them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95852534562 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72601210003 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497695852535 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.4414356642 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.125 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 5.21951772744 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239483505089 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843103305628 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581539775373 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141731340678 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442662539682 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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