It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and progressive era in which we live in, all human beings are always striving to increase their general knowledge through using social media and the internet. Whereas some individuals debate that nowadays, children education is much easier than in the past due to an increase in the rate of using the internet, social media and games, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that this phenomenon is not accurately true. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with the second mental attitude. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.
To begin with, one of the most destructive and catastrophic effects of using cell phones and social media on children education is that those are really time-consuming and children give much time to using them. This issue leads children's minds to be preoccupied with a lot of irrelevant subjects which do not actually teach them anything or increase their general knowledge. As an example, my brother's son is only five years old and he spends much time, around eight hours a day, on the Internet to see soccer players' photos in Web sites. However, this phenomenon does not lead to learning more and it just takes his invaluable time via seeing dispensable pictures.
Moreover, it is no secret to anyone that using social media on cell phones and playing games on the internet adversely affect the concentration of children on their paramount and indispensable tasks. Regarding this fact that children are able to find attractive topics in the Websites, consequently, their minds are always involved in those subjects and moreover, they have much less focus on the instructive and constructive subjects. An example can shed some light on the subject. In the aforementioned example, my niece always tries to imitate his favorite soccer player's behavior because that person is in his mind for 24 hours. This issue distracts him from concentrating on one of his necessary tasks, practising for the art class. Therefore, if he lived in the past and did not have access to those things, he would have concentrated on his works.
To wrap it up, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that in comparison to the past, education of children is not easy these days owing to the increasing the rate of their access to using cell phones and other related things to the Internet. This is because, for most of the time, they waste their time and lose their concentrations without learning any new thing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minds being'.
Suggestion: minds being
... using them. This issue leads childrens minds to be preoccupied with a lot of irrelevant su...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, however, if, moreover, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00231481481 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82867623646 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.0250126332 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0625 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188440723162 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579811626 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491401716508 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118034112965 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407767242747 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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