An increasing number of the children are overweight could result many problems when they grow older both in term of their health and health care costs.
why do you think so many children are overweight?
what could be done to solve this problem?
people these days are surrounded by a controversial issue that the amount of children are overweight increasing quickly and it cause a huge impact on the health and their daily life. this essay will illustrate the reason why are there are a lot of fat childrens and some suggestions to deal with this problem.
Firstly, the main cause of the strong growth of obesity is the non-stop expansion of unhealthy diet like fast food and the food that include the high i of sugar. Many experts agrees that sugar might be as addictive as cocaine; therefore, it proves that inside a cake or a candy or a soft drink, which children generally interested in, contain a huge amount of sugar. Additionally, due to the development of life, people are always on the go; thus, parents choose the junk food as their children's meal and also they are cheap to buy. thus, they become the fast food junkie because of the deliciousness of this kind of food. Consequently, the proportion of overweight offspring in developed country are increasing days by days.
Secondly, to solve this problem, exercises play an essential role in maintaining a healthy body; hence, doctors should advise the client and also the children to exercise at least three times a week for 20 minutes.The government should promote a healthy diet and exercise as well. Moreover, instead of staying at home and stick their eyes on the screen in order to play video game, children should go out to practice some sport activities to avoid the heart disease and diabetes. Furthermore, people need to be informed about what foods contain and they should be recommended eating 5 portions of fruit and vegetable per day.
In conclusion, reducing obesity is necessary and people need to solve this problem immediately and hopefully they would have a critical thinking to have a safe solution for childrens.
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- An increasing number of the children are overweight could result many problems when they grow older both in term of their health and health care costs.why do you think so many children are overweight?what could be done to solve this problem? 78
- An increasing number of the children are overweight could result many problems when they grow older both in term of their health and health care costs.why do you think so many children are overweight?what could be done to solve this problem? 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, at least, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91082802548 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71314403484 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585987261146 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5367880078 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.181818182 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5454545455 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3636363636 7.06120827912 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233457278021 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807365954508 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436825707586 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137598961768 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518640016969 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.