An increasing number of the children are overweight could result many problems when they grow older both in term of their health and health care costs.
why do you think so many children are overweight?
what could be done to solve this problem?
Health is an important issue in the world and people try to have healthy life. One of the sign of being healthy is your weight. because when you are fit, it means your <span tabindex="0" lang="en">Cholesterol</span><span class="mceItemHidden"></span> and diabete is normal. unfortunately most people specifically children are over weight and they don't care about that or they don't know how to solve this problem. In the following of this text, the cause of being overweight and solutions of that will be discussed.
As mentioned above being fat person is not good and it is sign of some of your disease. parent should force their children to do physical activity instead of playing computer games. because when their children don't have enough activity, they don't spend their energy and it is change to the some fat and store in their body. Unfotunatelly most child are lazy and they prefer to stay in front of TV or play computer games. they should change their way and do a sport which is interest on it.
On the other hand by getting help from new technology we can push children to play some sport during playing computer games. some manufacturer like Sony and X-BOX invent a new instrument for video game which is encourage children to do physical activity. But it's not enough and their parent should teach them how do some excercise which help them be healthy.
As conclusion, parents should change the way of their children life and encourage them to be active person in society and spend their energy in a correct way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97328244275 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.07544412295 2.80592935109 145% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522900763359 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 388.8 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.441387656 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0714285714 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 7.06120827912 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200468782291 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705925560847 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434940177923 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112851175101 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338326166396 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 78.4519038076 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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