In this modern age, highly innovative technological gadgets have been introduced in all over the world such as LCD TV, Laptops, Desktop computer, iPhone, iPad, smart phones, play station and much more. Today there are majority of children are interested to watch television or playing games on the computer and ignoring outdoor activity like football, swimming, jogging, shopping, lawn tennis, cricket, table tennis and basketball. This problem is creating miserable results for the future. There are some reason drawbacks and solutions with this kind of group sample. However, I personally think with that outdoor activity is much better than indoor stuffs.
Today, most of the parents can afford to buy electronic gadgets like a tv and computer for their children and concurrently they are also spoiling their kids by allowing them to use those electronic items each day. Furthermore, guardains are also not giving enough time to their child because they try to give main attention to their professional job. Therefore, this is the main reason that due to lack of encouragement and care from parents, many kids are having less interest in the playground activities and simultaneously they might get physically and mentally weak whilst utilizing more hour in electronic stuffs. This consequence displays dismissive development because the younger generation are the present and future of the nation. So, if they don’t give attention to participate in the outdoor activity, they will not be able to compete in this competitive business world.
Besides that prolonged staying indoors lessen children's chances for social interaction with their friends or having gatherings with their family members. This is essential because it assists kids to maintain a healthy mindset. It helps them to build up a positive mood to carry on with other tasks.
In solution, the main factor is parents should make strict rules on their kids like time table. For instance, by giving specific time to use gadgets and more hours in outdoor activities to their children. In an additional, they also have to involve to play with their kids. Thus, this strategy not only makes more active to their child, it also keeps mental and physical health strong.
To sum up, I strongly believe with that outdoor activity brings beneficial outcomes. There should be planned a time schedule on using gadgets at home and outdoor activities. Moreover, parents also have to look forward on their kids hobby and health concomitantly. To add more, they should be engages to do outdoor tasks with their children together in order to encourage and motivate them. Consequently, their kids will be more likely to spend their time in playground activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in fact, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2297.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 436.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26834862385 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68166546086 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571100917431 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4556616783 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.409090909 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266578532581 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803238227786 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467717619317 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155194280445 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365953434717 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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