The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world . School Should cut art and music out of the curricular, so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology.TO what extent you agree ?

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The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world . School Should cut art and music out of the curricular, so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology.
TO what extent you agree ?

Submitted by Pritika96 on Mon, 02/25/2019 - 12:36

avoid the lectures like music and arts because of student easily concentrate on science related subjects or school must emphasis on recreational lectures like drawings, musics and many more. Here, I firmly believe that schools gives more important and organise special lectures for arts and playing with musical instruments.

There are manifolds points for shore up my opinion. First and foremost, in 21st century schools organize more lectures on science and maths, due to this students not easily concentrated on all subjects. In addition, scientific research also reveals that study with musics benefits for pupils and they more grasp knowledge than other students. although musics and arts lecture difficult to maintain with stringent curriculum, but at overall students get benefits with arts subject. Furthermore, topics like building models in art often creates new interest in children and in future it would be become new opportunity and they will flourish with new ability and expertise. Thus, virtue of this we can say that musics and arts are inevitable in school life.

Further emphasizing on my point of view, in modern world musics and arts are equally important. in modern world people don't like listen musics ? However, computer science related subjects are important but without own interests like playing a music and developing arts future will be became worthless. Since students earn the money with study in college, they like to work in extra activities. Moreover, today many students organize live concerts in order to paid their tuition fees. Hence, on the heels of these evidence I strongly say that it could be better for children if higher authority give equal importance to all subjects. Also, most of students survive in all condition even if their primary source of money become fallen, with owing to having secondary ability to earning money like singing a song and with help of cartography.

To conclude, every coin has two sides, there are also cons because of children psychological tendency more towards musics and arts if schools do not organize time properly such lectures then it might be affects education level of pupils. But, in other hand undeniably, we can say that school should organize extra time periods for arts and musics because there are plethora of positive impacts on children.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, thus, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23733333333 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53707234419 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562666666667 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2488058836 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.529411765 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20843196304 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759457763759 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538462782231 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144546892617 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396275717226 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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