TPO12
It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Being informed about academic subjects and having broad knowledge in many fields play a prominent role in people's success. It comes as no surprise that efforts to finding the best knowledges for being successful in today's world have been always among the top priorities. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether it is better for people to specialize in one area or they should enhance their knowledge in different realms. I, to a great extent, concur with the idea that it is far better for people to have various knowledges. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated by the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point that makes me hold this belief is that people who have broader knowledge feel more self-confidence and self-respect. It goes without saying that knowledgeable people are encouraged by other people and praised which helps them improve their confidence and power. Self-confidence is one of the momentous factors for prosperous. Perhaps a more specific example can shed more light on the matter. When I was in the university, I had a friends named Sam. He was very shy at first, but he was really knowledgeable. He was familiar with different knowledges in various fields, so he could speak appropriately in different meeting. Other people always encourage him; thus, his self-confidence surprisingly improve after few months and he became a sociable person. He could quickly find a decent job after graduation since he felt really confidence and power.
Another reason deserving some words here is that knowledgeable people have more job opportunities rather than people specializing in one area. Without any shadows of doubt, there are many careers in every country that people are more inclined to continue this kind of jobs because of their prestige, salary and many other factors. After a while, these professions are saturated, and they have not any capacity for accepting new employees. In this circumstance, the people are successful who have different knowledge to seek other jobs. As I remember, when I wanted to start university, there were many job opportunity for Electrical Engineers. Thus, I was inclined to continue my study in this field. Fortunately, my parents forced me to study data analysis as a second major alongside my Electrical Engineering. After my graduation, the careers in Electrical field are saturated, but I could find a great job in Instagram Company as a data analyst. Had I not study data analysis, I would not have had any choices for my employment.
Finally, yet importantly, people who have broad knowledge of many subjects have broaden relationships as well. When people join classes in different subjects, they get familiar with various people with different attitudes and considerations. They can improve their social skills since they figure out how to behave with various people in different situation. This abilities helps them in their future job especially in today's world which needs broad communicational skills. For example, when I studied data analysis besides engineering, I knew that concerns and viewpoints of engineers is totally different from data analysts which almost all of them were business people. I learned how to behave with these two groups of people since my social skills had improved during those days.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned paragraphs, one can soon realize that having broad knowledge of many academic subjects is far better than specializing in one realm since not only does it improve people's confidence, but also people have more job opportunities and it can improve their social skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a friend' or simply 'friends'?
Suggestion: a friend; friends
...er. When I was in the university, I had a friends named Sam. He was very shy at first, bu...
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Line 3, column 835, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'since the felt'?
Suggestion: since the felt
...ckly find a decent job after graduation since he felt really confidence and power. Another...
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Line 7, column 81, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'broadened'.
Suggestion: broadened
...e broad knowledge of many subjects have broaden relationships as well. When people join...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
... various people in different situation. This abilities helps them in their future jo...
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Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'help'.
Suggestion: help
... in different situation. This abilities helps them in their future job especially in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, really, regarding, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3092.0 1977.66487455 156% => OK
No of words: 588.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25850340136 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96276856902 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482993197279 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 966.6 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7396903311 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.066666667 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239592018164 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641898684299 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961305553822 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174033260792 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112534027129 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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