Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business bring about the death of local communities.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In Kazakhstan, there is an issue in society about what type of impact the closure of regional businesses due to the widespread of shopping malls have on the regional community. Some sociologists believe that the impact would lead to the destruction of local communities. This essay disagrees with this point of view for the following reasons.
The first reason is the poor connection between the closure of regional business and local groups of people. Apart from local companies, there are many other aspects of society that unit people into groups, such as local traditions, customs, language and history. These components of society can withstand even if local business is completely shut down. For example, in Karaganda city, even though multinational companies entered and swallowed almost all small companies in the region in 2002, regional congregations not only have survived from their entry, but also have thrived so far.
Another reason why communities can survive even if local business is annihilated by supermarkets is that the entry of large companies attracts more investment into the region. Local communities will benefit from the emergence of malls in their areas since their introduction in the region attracts more participants from the global market to invest money as well. As a result, this will bring a positive effect on local societies, since they will have more access to job places and better services.
However, some sociologists state that local societies will disappear along with the local business. The main reason for this opinion is that the end of local companies will result in a rise in unemployment. The joblessness will force many people to find jobs in other regions, leaving only a small number of people working in these malls. Despite this, supermarkets will be able to employ all jobless people in the region so as to deter the desire for abandoning the region. This can be achieved by involving many workers from locals in order to maintain large supermarkets and deliver products in time.
In conclusion, after analyzing, it is clear that it is pointless to worry about the future of local communities once supermarkets take control of the local market, as there is a weak connection between business and society as well as the region would attract more investors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, well, apart from, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16710875332 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74231048568 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511936339523 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0762644103 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.75 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285552730619 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109200720302 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062011267016 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173406507485 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252280055902 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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