Nowadays more and more young people hold the important positions in the government. Some people think that it is a good thing, while others argue that it is not suitable. Discuss both views and your own opinion.
Young people used to be excluded or overlooked as political candidates. The construction of government officials has changed greatly as the reform in the society deepens. This means more and more positions are made up by younger generations. Although some people think this is inappropriate, I believe there are more benefits.
On the one hand, people advocating this situation think that more young employees in vital positions can bring vitality to the whole system. Commonly, governments show a serious status among the public. However, performing regulations and policies in a traditional way does not appeal the public anymore. In this case, the high proportion of young age groups who can participate in making decisions in the government promises innovative and up-to-date results as young people think in a more advanced way compared with senior decision makers.
On the other hand, some people think young people holding important positions in the government is not a good idea mainly because calmness and experience are crucial for government workers while most young officials lack these characteristics. There is no denying that the government is one of the most important sectors of a nation as it is the one that may influence the whole country. The economic crisis, for example, could be demolished only by the help of the measures taken by governments. The younger generations who lack experience cannot solve such big problems, thus getting panic instead of calming down. Indeed, senior officials can handle different situations fluently.
In my opinion, although experience from older generations is pretty important, this can be tackled by senior officials acting as mentors. In other words, instead of keeping a higher proportion of older government officials, experienced ones can help youngsters in dealing with daily work. Gradually, the minors are likely to handle documents or events in a both innovative and experienced way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a traditional way" with adverb for "traditional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, thus, while, for example, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.97073170732 353% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 965.302439024 172% => OK
No of words: 306.0 196.424390244 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41176470588 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93224497186 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 106.607317073 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562091503268 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 283.868780488 180% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.8955338379 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.23603664747 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260149999532 0.215688989381 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778113346891 0.103423049105 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956426276639 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158105848549 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753316799938 0.0819641961636 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 11.4140731707 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 40.7170731707 221% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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