Graduates who can not find work in their chosen fields should be advised to do a second degree, rather than taking a job that does not interest them. To what extent do you agree with this statement.
It is undeniable that people who have graduated from a university are likely to face adversity in finding a suitable job. Some people think that it would be better if they take a second degree. However, in my opinion, working seems to be more beneficial.
There are two main reasons to support further education. First of all, knowledge is a means and fuel driving human life. To grow in some careers, gaining as much as knowledge as possible is vital. Being knowledgeable enhances various types of skills such as critical thinking, creativity and how to deal with people. Moreover, knowledge not only broadens mindsets but also perspectives which are crucial to be a successful person. Secondly, if graduates finished their next degrees , they would have more opportunity in getting employed than the others who have less or lower degrees because companies always search for a capable person.
On the other hand, entering the workforce immediately after graduation has more benefits. The most important reason is getting precious experience by working. When people start to work, they absorb practical experience which are under real working conditions and more useful than keeping on theoretical study. The other reason is about money. working results in getting paid. And, money is essential for living. some people have financial problems which make them unable to further study. Therefore, they initially decide to work and save money. Apart from that, in some companies, they offer scholarships to employees who are skillful and have enriched experience and wish that they will have been working for their companies in return.
In conclusion, although further studying is somewhat useful in some careers , working helps in earning moneys and broadens experience as well as proficiency which will lead to a success in the future.
- The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. 73
- In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? 61
- as a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health.to what extent do you agree or disagree? 61
- Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 56
- The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, apart from, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30612244898 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70431895728 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598639455782 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.573440315 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1052631579 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4736842105 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15789473684 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139723748832 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402714933413 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387788315399 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909100879528 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581786283046 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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