the chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 to 2010.
Given is the bar chart which illustrating the proportion of people who were overweight divided by gender in Australia in the period from 1980 to 2010.
In general, it is obvious that the proportion of both men and women who were obesity experienced an upward trend between 1980 and 2010. In addition, throughout this period, the percentage of overweight Australian men was always higher than women.
In detailed, there was a fluctuation in the proportion of overweight males, proven by a dramatic increase from 1980 to 2000 and followed by a decline in 2010. Starting at the point of 40%,the figure rose significantly and reached a peak at around 65% in 2000. After 10 years the proportion of overweight men decreased gradually by 5% to just over 60%.
Compared to males, the figure of overweight females was lower by approximately 10% in 1980, which was around 30% and 40%, respectively. However, after 10 years, the distance between two gender was close with almost the same figures, occupying around 45%. The percentage of overweight females climbed up and reached the highest figure in this period to 53% . This figure remained unchanged in the next 10 years and still lower than the proportion of females.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lian men was always higher than women. In detailed, there was a fluctuation in th...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d reached a peak at around 65% in 2000. After 10 years the proportion of overweight m...
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Line 4, column 186, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'gender' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'genders'.
Suggestion: genders
...fter 10 years, the distance between two gender was close with almost the same figures,...
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Line 4, column 355, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...the highest figure in this period to 53% . This figure remained unchanged in the n...
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Line 4, column 458, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l lower than the proportion of females.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, still, in addition, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1012.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98522167488 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80121218337 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541871921182 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.1440736993 43.030603864 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.2 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28822168756 0.215688989381 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1144192196 0.103423049105 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114876064246 0.0843802449381 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201791810378 0.15604864568 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115357720316 0.0819641961636 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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