The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

The given line graph below compares 02 sexes: male and female in terms of the number of smoking per 1000 people who lived in Someland between 1960 and 2000.
In general, the most significant facts to emerge from the given graph are that the rate of smoking men decreased while that of women smoker increased. At the beginning of the period, the most of people smoking are men; however there is not significant difference between a number of man and women smokers at the end.
In the first year of the period, the figure for men was very high at around 600 people per 1000 chosen people meanwhile that of women smoker was significantly lower at nearly 100 people. The period from 1960 to 1975 experienced a minimal decline in the men smoker’s numbers of 100 people while the rate of smoking women rocketed threefold from nearly 100 to over 300 people athought that remained constant at about 200 women from 1965 to 1970.
In the last 25 years of the period, the result is the same the trend in the previous time that there was a continous dramatic decrease in the number of men using cigarettes from 500 to 250 people. In the same period, it is noticeable that the number of the people who were smoking women per 1000 people in Someland dropped slightly from more 300 to about 200 smoker, however just from 1990 to 2000 the figure of women smoker fell sharply by nearly 90 people

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 188, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ed. At the beginning of the period, the most of people smoking are men; however there is not s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...gh at around 600 people per 1000 chosen people meanwhile that of women smoker was sign...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 360, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'smoker' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'smokers'.
Suggestion: smokers
...ped slightly from more 300 to about 200 smoker, however just from 1990 to 2000 the fig...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1144.0 965.302439024 119% => OK
No of words: 250.0 196.424390244 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.576 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28241626352 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 334.8 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.2557652168 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.428571429 112.824112599 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.7142857143 22.9334400587 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.23603664747 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359794225907 0.215688989381 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184426845725 0.103423049105 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120166058125 0.0843802449381 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251936336055 0.15604864568 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951045805666 0.0819641961636 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.2329268293 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.33 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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