In many countries today, people buy a range of household goods (television, microwave, oven, and rice cookers) Is it a positive or negative development?
Electronic device has brought significant benefits to our lives in the past fifty years. Yet there remain some disagreements as to whether the increasingly growing use of household goods is a positive or negative trend. While there are valid arguments to the contrary arguing that purchase and use of household goods can lead to sedentary lifestyle, it is my personal view that the benefits of them far outweigh their drawbacks.
First of all, it is an indisputable fact that household goods facilitate the way we do household chores. In this hustle life like today, thanks to electronic device house stuffs is no more a burden on people who are bread-winners in family. Not only does the use house goods reduce time needed to complete the tasks, but it is also economical in terms of finance. Take the case of rice cook as a salient example. We used to have to buy coal and then make it burn to cook the rice, which took hours and lots of money. With the use of rice cookers, however, cooking the rice can be done just by a push of a button.
Equally important, the growing use of house goods causes the users to be more intelligent. Were it not for television, it would be difficult for us to catch the news as well as watch live game show. Controlling these electronic devices, furthermore, force users to read the manual instructions and apply into practical cases, which in consequence make users wiser. Even though the risk of obesity resulted from the very comfortable life is real, it can be eliminated easily by not abusing them to an extent.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that purchasing and using household goods exerts positive impact on our lives rather than detrimental effects. In year to come, I do believe that education programs showing how to use electronic device smartly and properly should be provided widely to reduce the risk of sedentary lifestyle.
- Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of population who are aged 15 and younger. What is your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries? 89
- As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree? 84
- In some cultures, the old ages is more valued, while in some cultures the youth is more valued. Discuss both view and give your own opinion. 73
- The map shows the development of the Chorleywood village. 11
- Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...rs. Yet there remain some disagreements as to whether the increasingly growing use of househo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 209, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...se stuffs is no more a burden on people who are bread-winners in family. Not only does ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ete the tasks, but it is also economical in terms of finance. Take the case of ri...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...n be done just by a push of a button. Equally important, the growing use of house goo...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, while, as to, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77575757576 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.699957487 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2323253119 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.066666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168120442084 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545243033232 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469284045664 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962466501737 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463779427047 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.