In some cultures, the old ages is more valued, while in some cultures the youth is more valued. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
There has been an increasingly growing interest in social welfare for the old in the recent years. While many people argue that the old play a pivotal role to the development of a nation, there still remain some disagreements as to whether the authorities should concentrate on developing the youth or taking care of the old. Overall, it is my personal view that either the old or the young are of equal importance.
On the one hand, the old people contribute to the development of a country in terms of their experience. It is an indisputable fact that were it not for the old, there wouldn’t be the young, particularly the well-educated young generation. Even though statements saying that the old are unable to work so it is useless to have excessive care for the old are somehow true, their views on society and economy cannot be easily replace by the young who lack hands-on experience.
On the other hand, thanks to enthusiasm, good education and health, the youth can bring a large number of benefits to the rapidly changing society. With their professional knowledge in diverse fields, the youth are without doubt essential to the innovation and growth of the economy of a nation. Take the case of Japan as a salient example, due to the aging population which causes to the shortage of workforce, they are facing ever low economic growth.
By way of conclusion, I once again affirm my position that both the old and the young exert positive impact on society at large. In the years to come, I do believe that proper policy should be adopted for the sake of looking after the old but not forgetting the youth to balance between the income and expenditures of a nation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
..., there still remain some disagreements as to whether the authorities should concentrate on d...
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Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ucation and health, the youth can bring a large number of benefits to the rapidly changing societ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1394.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74149659864 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74471882345 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.0229414732 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.727272727 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134637106846 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482085390525 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312435481491 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791523745335 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387763522416 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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