In some cultures, the old ages is more valued, while in some cultures the youth is more valued. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
There has been an increasingly growing interest in social welfare for the old in the recent years. While many people argue that the old play a pivotal role to the development of a nation, there still remain some disagreements as to whether the young are more valuable or not. Overall, it is my personal view that either the old or the young are of equal importance.
On the one hand, in Asia countries, people respect grandparents, older leaders, and bosses since the accumulated wisdom of older people can serve as a helpful guide for younger people. They bring experiential knowledge of just about every problem a human being can go through, which is hardly obtained by the young. It is illustrated by the fact that there are very few young politicians or company bosses anywhere in the world, apart from exceptions like Bill Clinton or Mark Zuckerberg.
On the other hand, thanks to enthusiasm, good education and health, the youth can bring a large number of benefits to the rapidly changing society. With their professional knowledge in diverse fields, the youth are without doubt essential to the innovation and growth of the economy of a nation. Take the case of Japan as a salient example, due to the aging population which causes to the shortage of workforce, they are facing ever low economic growth.
By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my position that both the old and the young exert positive impact on society. In the years to come, I do believe that proper policy should be adopted by the authorities for taking care of the old and bringing up the youth so as to maintain a sustainable development for a nation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
..., there still remain some disagreements as to whether the young are more valuable or not. Ove...
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Line 4, column 89, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ucation and health, the youth can bring a large number of benefits to the rapidly changing societ...
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Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...re of the old and bringing up the youth so as to maintain a sustainable development for ...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a sustainable development for a nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, still, thus, while, apart from, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78723404255 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69924083987 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599290780142 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.7336976446 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.727272727 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116501878061 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405979227856 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450352850562 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0683553806662 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591056947956 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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