The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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THE LINE GRAPH SHOWS THE COMPARISON OF SOME DOMINANT CHANGES BETWEEN THE CHINESE AND US BIRTH RATES FROM 1920 TO 2000
OVERALL, BOTH OF NATIONS SAW CONSIDERABLE FLUCTUATIONS IN FERTILITY, WITH LOWS DURING THE 1940S AND HIGHS DURING THE 1950S
FIRSTLY, THE BIRTH RATES OF CHINA WAS WITNESSED AN UPWARD TREND NEARLY 5 PERCENT AFTER EXPERIENCED A SLIGHT DECLINE OVER THE PERIOD. NEXT, THEY PLUMMETED DRAMATICALLY WITH 5 PERCENT IN 1940 WHICH STABILIZED IN NEXT 5 YEARS. WE CAN SEE CLEARLY THAT THERE WAS A REMARKABLE RISE THAT REACHED A RECORD HIGH TO 20 PERCENT IN 1950. FINALLY, FROM 1955 TO 2000 THEY GO DOWN STABLY
MEANWHILE, THE BIRTHS RATE OF US WENT UP SLIGHTLY IN 1935 WITH APPROXIMATELY 13 PERCENT. HOWEVER, AFTER 10 YEARS WE SAW A DROP TO THE LOWEST RATES WITH UNDER 5 PERCENT BUT THEY REACH A PEAK OF 15 PERCENT IN 1950. IN THE LAST PERIOD, THEY STILL EXPERIENCED A RAPID FALL

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ESE AND US BIRTH RATES FROM 1920 TO 2000 OVERALL, BOTH OF NATIONS SAW CONSIDERABL...
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Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...IOD, THEY STILL EXPERIENCED A RAPID FALL
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 921.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68518518519 4.92477711251 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 13.1305176527 2.65546596893 494% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648148148148 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 174.813869269 43.030603864 406% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.5 112.824112599 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.23603664747 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215215052949 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648901659006 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102059444129 0.0843802449381 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121159616054 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109550925779 0.0819641961636 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.2329268293 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 11.4140731707 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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