Its always good to take a feedback from others, this will make us familiar what are the area of improvement we need, what are our strength and weekness. No one in this world innately is the best, they become best by imporving on their weakness, and try to change themself my adopting new habits.
For instance, Steve Jobs the cofounder of the Apple company, initially he created one basic model of mobile, he launched the mobile in the market.Then start asking the mobile users, about the feedback of the mobile, what are the improve to me made in order to make the best smart phone. Many people took interest and give the sincere feedback. Afterwards Steve Jobs read all the feedback and starting working on the weakness that were mentioned by the users.Year by year Steves keep on improving on his mobile product, and keep on launching every year the predecessors mobile with the enhace version of it, then again he keeps on taking the feedback and working on it. Many user start buying his product and start liking it, by this his company became the first company to touch the revenue of one trillion.
Many a times people does not give sincere feedfack, may be due to some personal issue or they want to put you out of track by critising and passing vague comments, so we always have to be consious about all this kind of of feedback and try to eradicate them.Like in the above example Steve might have recieve too many sever bad or unrelated comments, which might have been given by his commpetitors, but he found it, but all these feedback aside.
According to me, The best leader are those who not only encourage feedback from people whom they lead but they start working on the weakness and try to improve in the best possible way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Then
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...akness that were mentioned by the users.Year by year Steves keep on improving on his...
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...have to be consious about all this kind of of feedback and try to eradicate them.Like...
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Suggestion: Like
...f of feedback and try to eradicate them.Like in the above example Steve might have r...
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Message: Did you mean 'this feedback' or 'these feedbacks'?
Suggestion: this feedback; these feedbacks
... commpetitors, but he found it, but all these feedback aside. According to me, The best lea...
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Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...nd it, but all these feedback aside. According to me, The best leader are those who not only...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, so, then, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 311.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63022508039 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32108465152 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553054662379 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 23.0359550562 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.152906756 60.3974514979 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.0 118.986275619 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.875 23.4991977007 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276844098002 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140269214931 0.0831039109588 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.195070127999 0.0758088955206 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23052674977 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.241273677259 0.0667264976115 362% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.1392134831 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 48.8420337079 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.2143820225 153% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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