More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, car and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In this modern era, more and more people want to buy well-known brands, for example, clothes, cars, and other items. This trend can be explained by high-quality products as well as the requirements of customers desire to be successful in life. In my opinion, this tendency will cause some negative development in people's lives.

Many reasons are able to explain the rapid increase in the number of why people want to buy luxurious items. First of all, thanks to cutting-edge technologies, a variety of companies such as Louis Vuitton, Channel, Gucci, manufacture an excellent quality of clothes, helping people to be more comfortable to wear. Moreover, these items sometimes made by high-skill craftsmen; therefore, the owner is capable of using them for many years without changing another one. Second of all, the famous products can not only give an owner a sense of confidence towards the other but also a chance for them to show their social status. Last but not least, people purchase many reputable brands because of its sophisticated and unique appearance.

Nonetheless, I believe that this trend will impact both people and society negatively. People purchase those products not because they need it but because it is trendy. For example, many teenagers spend plenty of their budgets that parents gave to them buying luxurious items such as iPhone XS, GUCCI's handbag; and then, posting it into the social media to show their followers and get more famous. It is a detrimental trend because it will have more and more adolescences emulate that action. Furthermore, it is no far-fetched to imagine how wide the gap between the poor and the rich. People in a middle-class want to the appetite for owning lavish items, which put their future financial security at risk; therefore, the poor are poorer, and the rich are richer.

In conclusion, the increase of consumption of brand name products might be explained by their appearance, qualification, and I believe that this tendency is disadvantageous to our next generation and society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: IT_IS_NO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'not' or 'now'?
Suggestion: not; now
...emulate that action. Furthermore, it is no far-fetched to imagine how wide the gap...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1377245509 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83188587539 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568862275449 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2671270696 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.4 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2666666667 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246904452025 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813644364388 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828098029537 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142093041571 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751058097287 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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