Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
it is argued that some individuals are gifted with talents for sport or music since birth. other times, however, it is said that a person can be trained into a great sports player or musician. while people can learn faster than others if they possess gifted talents, I believe that, through time, any child can be taught to become a phenomenon.
On the one hand, having talents since birth allows people to master some training much faster than others. In other words, some individuals somehow have the ability to understand lessons and put them into good practice in just a small amount of time and show improvements sooner than ordinary ones. For example, at the age of 14, Christiano Ronaldo was discovered by a local coach while he was trying to control a ball for the first time. Four years later, he could outperform most other soccer players. however, I believe that people with natural talents are limited to advance in only some particular fields.
On the other hand, everyone can become very good in any fields if they follow their training persistently. this is to say that it takes quite a long time of practice for a person to master a skill and most people tend to quit midway. if they are patient and finish this training process, they will surely achieve their goals and succeed in becoming a good sportsperson or musician. For instance, the National Piano Academy in Ho Chi Minh City has reported that 90% of their students, who thoroughly passed the course of 5 years, graduated to become famous pianists throughout Vietnam. Therefore, I believe that persistence in training will lead anyone to huge successes.
In conclusion, although those, who possess natural talents, can quickly learn and get good at some sports or musical instruments, any child can be taught to master any skills if they are persistent through time.
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- Parents often give children everything they ask for and do what they like. Is it good for children? What are the consequences when they grow up? 73
- Scientists agree that many people are eating too much junk food and it is damaging to their health. Some people think that these problems can be solved by educating people to eat less junk food. Other people believe that education will not work. Discuss b 84
- While recruiting a new employee the employer should pay more attention to personal qualities rather than qualification and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree. 78
- Some people think that introducing new technology can improve people s quality of life However others believe that free education should be offered Discuss both views and give you own opinion 59
- Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial to their future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important To what extent do you agree or disagree 92
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...talents for sport or music since birth. other times, however, it is said that a perso...
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...into a great sports player or musician. while people can learn faster than others if ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 937.175257732 164% => OK
No of words: 315.0 206.0 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87619047619 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49363816391 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 127.690721649 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565079365079 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 466.2 290.88556701 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.7861803751 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.714285714 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 4.34317383033 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00889962824217 0.216113520407 4% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00301322684018 0.0766984524023 4% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00738086823769 0.0603063233224 12% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00490053627064 0.12726935374 4% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00490262548801 0.0580467560999 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 41.2886597938 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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