Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Opinions differ as to whether adolescents should take part-time jobs to have the first impressions of the working environment or they should focus on personal activities to relax after school. In my opinion, I believe the first option is more beneficial for young people.
To begin with, it is understandable why people argue that teenagers should take their time resting and doing after-school activities. One reason is that a complete relaxation may help a majority of students refill their energy for the next lessons. Since studying in school could be tiring for many youngsters, participating in activities such as traveling or playing sports would leave them sometimes to revise the last lessons, prepare for the next classes and thus, improve their academic performance.
However, I side with those who think the young should take part-time jobs to have more disciplines and experiences in life. One reason to support my standpoint is that people in the age group of 13 to 18 tend to be more impulsive in spending money because most of them are financially supported by their parents. By earning a small salary from these jobs, these individuals will start to appreciate the value of money and become more independent of their family. In Vietnam, for example, more and more students are able to pay for their own expenses themselves and spend money more wisely after doing part-time jobs. Moreover, early exposure to the working environment will also improve young people’s socialization ability which will vastly boost their main career later in their lives.
In conclusion, I assert that teenagers should definitely work part-time to gain more experiences and enhance their social skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinions differ as to whether adolescents should take part-time jobs ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25547445255 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80156026948 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602189781022 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3959622481 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.909090909 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9090909091 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1818181818 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321541589842 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122482380195 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810954488401 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200896217751 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441148450209 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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