do you agree or disagree with the following statement? young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is definitely transparent that prosperity and failure of society are relied on decisions making practices. Although some people believe that young people do not have significant effects on the future of a community, others assume that the youth play a prominent role in society and their effects are undeniable. In my perspective, I agree with the latter group and each of my reasons are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, although the juveniles do not have enough experience, they are more courageous and ambitious in comparison with old people. In addition, they have the desire to breed innovation and new ideas which help them to be more creative. My friend experience is a compelling example of this. Two years ago she was recruited in the company which manufactured refinery and petrochemical equipment. Her colleagues who were older than her and had more skills just stock in convection and were very slow in reaction. From the first days of her work, she tried to use modern methods in her job and it was important for her that the company approach the determined goals. Therefore her motivation and tremendous efforts had profound impacts on the fulfillment of the company's goals and improved productivity in manufacturing.
Secondly, the youth who legitimately are allowed to vote in the presidential election can indirectly affect the political decisions. For instance, two years ago a presidential election was held in my country. Two popular candidates who belonged to different parties competed officially with each other. One of them was more concerned about the fresh generation and he had a special plan to provide more job opportunities for them. The other one focused on the problems of the elderly and feeble people who received a state pension. The vast majority of society members who were juveniles participated in the election and voted in favor of their patron so the candidate who had considerable attention to the fresh generation’s issue to win more than 85% votes cast.
In conclusion, in spite of some people who argue that the young generations do not affect future of the community, I believe that not only they have particular talent and ability which help them to work innovatively but also they can impact on the determined decision of their country by taking part in a political election. Therefore they play an important and major role in a community which is not inevitable.
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- TPO-41(INTEGRATED WRITING) 76
- some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. do you think this is a good idea? 60
- TPO-44some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate 66
- TPO-44 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 665, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... company approach the determined goals. Therefore her motivation and tremendous efforts h...
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Line 4, column 325, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...by taking part in a political election. Therefore they play an important and major role i...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09476309227 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98029924144 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526184538653 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6010294555 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155524158115 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044588199328 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480140021859 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109730785607 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735180273842 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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