Mankind is insatiable by nature since the beginning. People -including me sometimes- does not grateful for what they have and wants more in a very covetous way. The things that people want can be vary from food to a land. I strongly believe that this world order will be the same and never going to change. Thus, I agree with the statement and the reasons behind this notion will be explained in this essay.
Initially, I want to draw attention to certain significant points namely, poverty, starvation, and war. All these points and more have been the consequences of the greedy for money of humankind for thousands of years. There are people who can not even find a slice of bread and on the other hand there are people who puts many delicious, untouched food in garbage without a second thought. Many has no ability to empathy. For example, parents who have high life standards raising their children without teaching to share or contentment. Therefore, this chain goes on and on. Since family is the smallest part of the community, I do not think that people in future are going to be more satisfied so the squandering will last forever.
Unsatisfied people always cause a trouble in their homes, schools or in any other community. Their endless needs never ends and eventually they make disgust everyone around them. Let's think about a child who has never troubled to get what he/she want. Every toy or candy/chocolate/food is going to be meaningless for that child over time. Hence, that child would not be able to realize this wrong behavior and furthermore, he/she is always want something more or new again and again. The result is not only causes to waste of money and material but also causes to form a blind character for a child. Whereas, if we think about a kid who could not get what he/she wanted quickly or could not get at all, that kid would know the worth of the things he/she has and be merciful for them. Additionally, some researches showed that, children who has less toys has a better imagination thus they could be more successful in future.
Another thing that makes me tedious is that the plastic surgery craze. I am not agains to it but in last couple of years, plastic surgery become a must for many people because of the new beauty perception. Mostly women do that to look better and and there is no end in this progress. Even there are many news about the terrible and upsetting results of these operations, people insists to do that to themselves because their look does not satisfy them. It is like there is a race. I hope people start to see that there is no point to look the same to be seen beautiful.
In a nut shell, we do the evil to ourselves by being greedy. Asking for more is of course our right however, we must be able to see the limits to be satisfied. Otherwise, we could become an unsatisfied, blind and careless person.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...they make disgust everyone around them. Lets think about a child who has never troub...
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Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...o has never troubled to get what he/she want. Every toy or candy/chocolate/food is g...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'wanted'.
Suggestion: wanted
...avior and furthermore, he/she is always want something more or new again and again. ...
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Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'forming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: forming
...e of money and material but also causes to form a blind character for a child. Whereas,...
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Line 5, column 845, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun toys is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...esearches showed that, children who has less toys has a better imagination thus they...
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Line 5, column 915, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...tion thus they could be more successful in future. Another thing that makes me tediou...
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Line 7, column 243, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...on. Mostly women do that to look better and and there is no end in this progress. Even ...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...no end in this progress. Even there are many news about the terrible and upsetting r...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...no end in this progress. Even there are many news about the terrible and upsetting result...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, whereas, another thing, for example, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60700389105 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51669169228 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503891050584 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9508275067 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6551724138 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.724137931 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96551724138 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182549504338 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431457309763 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453856743388 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976428320212 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596314088926 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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