Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and arts when school buildings are need of repair.
The author claims that when school buildings need to be repaired then the schools should two things: prioritize these maintenance jobs and raise the fund for these maintenance jobs from reducing funds from extracurricular activities. It is no doubt that the school authorities have to make a difficult choice between the two options, but it would be hasty to put into place a written policy that the fund for repairing jobs must be arrange by curtailing the funds for sports and arts. There are other avenues for the school authority for collecting fund for repairing tasks. The primary job of the school is to deliver quality education to the students, but at the same time it is also of paramount importance for the students to take part in sports and literature activities for the mental development. Therefore, before curtailing funds from sports and arts for doing repairing tasks, the schools should meticulously consider whether the repairing jobs are inhibiting the school to provide education to the students.
For example, if a school’s heating system breaks down during winter or the roof weakens then clearly the school will need to perform these maintain jobs immediately because these things prevent the school from providing education to the student. As the first and foremost job of any school is to provide education to students, so these things which prevent the school from doing so need to be repaired immediately. In this case, the school authority may consider to cut budget for sports and arts and that fund can be used for maintenance job.
Alternatively, suppose the building needs to be repainted and in this case the school authority should not use money from the budget of the extracurricular activities. Because the nature of repainting is aesthetic and it does not inhibits the school from giving quality to students. Though, these kind aesthetic jobs are also important. But repainting need not to do immediately, so the authority may collect fund from other sources or the school authority may consider to the building every six years instead of every four years.
The examinations of these two hypothetical examples allow us to reveal a problematic assumption with the original assertion. The school always faces the dilemma of between funding school repairing tasks and extracurricular funding. If significant necessary repairs are needed then there are other avenues for collecting funds: government grants, bonds, fund raising programs etc.
In conclusion, the author’s assertion is too narrowly drawn. It is entirely possible to cut funding to some extra programs when it faces difficulties in collecting fund for the repairing task which interfere with academics if not addressed immediately. After all, the school must first deliver education to achieve it’s objectives. For other kind of repairing jobs which does not inhibit the school to provide academics to students, the school should not cut down the funds of sports and arts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider cutting'.
Suggestion: consider cutting
... In this case, the school authority may consider to cut budget for sports and arts and that fun...
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Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'inhibit'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: inhibit
...repainting is aesthetic and it does not inhibits the school from giving quality to stude...
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Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'inhibit'
Suggestion: inhibit
...repainting is aesthetic and it does not inhibits the school from giving quality to stude...
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Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...school from giving quality to students. Though, these kind aesthetic jobs are also imp...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'do'?
Suggestion: do
...also important. But repainting need not to do immediately, so the authority may colle...
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Line 7, column 380, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rants, bonds, fund raising programs etc. In conclusion, the author's asserti...
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Line 9, column 505, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... cut down the funds of sports and arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, after all, for example, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2521.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25208333333 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84125042773 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435416666667 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6517236272 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.684210526 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2631578947 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.513588456905 0.243740707755 211% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185205322554 0.0831039109588 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115506337455 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316003468198 0.150359130593 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931157441247 0.0667264976115 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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