TPO46
Based on the set of reading material, the author contends that storing the medical records will benefits over the paper based record in three main aspects. On the other hand, the lecturer casts doubt that the information is presented in the reading passage, and believe the presented reasons is not convincing enough.
First of all, the writer illustrates that electronic records will reduce the cost of storage for paper record. However, the speaker in the listening claims that it will not save any cost for using electronic record. For legal reason, the doctors have to keep the paper based record. Plus paper records have the emergency use. Thus, the first point in the passage does not hold the water.
In addition, the reading asserts that electronic records will reduce medical error due to poor hand writing. Yet again, the professor refutes this point and posits that doctors still have to use paper, because they use paper for prescription. In this way, the poor hand writing will appear anyway. Therefore, the electronic records will not help for reducing the medical errors.
Despite the statement in passage that electronic record helps the medical research, professor reputes that it is very difficult to use patients' medical record for research due to privacy law in United States. The law allows patients to keep their medical records in private for any reason. Researchers have to get so many not granted permission and follow strict laws to use these electronic records.
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- TPO-52. Integrated Writing Task. Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage. 80
- Summary the points in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points in the reading passage. 100
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...s that storing the medical records will benefits over the paper based record in three ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, in addition, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12244897959 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37242242689 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 145.348785872 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 381.6 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0124699276 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6428571429 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.522960776088 0.272083759551 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206692335781 0.0996497079465 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128729815901 0.0662205650399 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326928637455 0.162205337803 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796326645608 0.0443174109184 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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