In life, many moments will occur, including the hardships. Reacting to the situations, some people tend to just accept it, while others will struggle to improve their current circumstances. I personally agree with the latter opinion, where people should strive to get a better condition, although each view has its own positive impacts.
On the one hand, when facing difficulties in life, some people tend to just accept them. It is because they are afraid that changing their attitude will only lead to a worsened situation. For the example, an employee is working in a company that pays him with a very low wages. He actually has a choice to leave that firm and seek for a better work opportunities. But, he does not choose this option because he has a lot of debt to be paid off. If he quits, he will have a greater chance to be unemployed, therefore decreasing his opportunity to pay those debts. So, for some people, struggling for changes will only lead to a exacerbated situation.
On the other hand, other people may react differently toward the bad situations. They are those who are brave enough to face the risks that will be faced when attempting to change the bad circumstances. Consider an example, a fitness motivator and young entrepreneur named Dennis Hadi. He was previously an employee of a bank, but he felt that his wage is not enough to get a financial freedom. Thus, he chose to quit, and started to open his own business, despite the failure risks that he might face at that time. As a result, he is finally succeed to get out from that bad circumstances and reached his goal to achieve a financial freedom.
In conclusion, although striving for changes will lead us to more risky situation, in the end it will successfully improve our situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'wage'?
Suggestion: wage
...a company that pays him with a very low wages. He actually has a choice to leave that...
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Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...truggling for changes will only lead to a exacerbated situation. On the other...
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Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'financial freedom'.
Suggestion: financial freedom
...felt that his wage is not enough to get a financial freedom. Thus, he chose to quit, and started to...
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Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
...t that time. As a result, he is finally succeed to get out from that bad circumstances ...
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Line 5, column 623, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'financial freedom'.
Suggestion: financial freedom
...stances and reached his goal to achieve a financial freedom. In conclusion, although striving fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76051779935 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75073672092 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572815533981 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.8623503601 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.5294117647 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151021266286 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051430850494 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517638555369 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10003933533 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448017401533 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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