Many people argue that nowadays upbringing of children is greatly affected by the media they are exposed to and the company they keep. However, others are of the opinion that family is still the foremost factor that determines a child's development. Wile both sides have convincing arguments, I believe, social factors like TV and friends have largely replaced parental influence.
Those who think familial impact being more important proclaim that parents and siblings are first mentors for the children. Kids start looking up to them from early childhood so this form of pedagogy begins far before they can indulge in media commodities or socialize with other kids. Thus, values instilled by parents single-handedly become a part of their conscious as well as sub-conscious personalities. Moreover, it is argued that kids are most receptive in first years of their lives and adapt to their surroundings conveniently. Since most of that time is spent in parental supervision, it is possible for parents to tweak traits to their children according to their own customs before any external factor can get a chance to interfere in this process.
However, I believe that nowadays children are more prone to teachings delivered to them by technology and society. To begin with, a fast-paced life has made parents occupied with plethora of work and career goals so, most of their time is spent in workplaces rather than with their offspring. An adult in America, for instance, spends an average of nine hours per day in office often without even a decent lunch break. This hectic schedule does not allow working father and mother to give sufficient attention to their children. Consequently, kids become more attached to electronic devices like TV or spend most of their time with their social groups learning important life lessons from them instead of their family. In addition to this peer pressure plays a significant role nowadays because kids are more prone to adapting habits from their age fellows. Finally, an increase in smart phones and iPad ownership among younger age group has also added to the trend of social factors influencing upbringing of children. A recent study conducted by Oxford university shows that screen time has escalated to an average of over five hours per day among the age group lower than ten in last decade due to easy accessibility of technological devices where online music and TV channels can be streamed. Therefore, these hefty figures clearly prove that parental influence over personality development of children has plummeted significantly and external factors like TV and peers have become new tutors of the younger ones.
To sum it up, although some people still think family holds most power when it comes to teaching values to younger generation, I believe this perception is rather fallacious. In reality, things like friends and media have become main stakeholders in deciding set of characteristics that will manifest in a young fellows. Therefore, it is not surprising to predict that in near future social factors will cater spiritual needs and parental roles will be solely limited to providing children with materialistic things only.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 41.998997996 195% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2672.0 1615.20841683 165% => OK
No of words: 515.0 315.596192385 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18834951456 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74725649145 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 176.041082164 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55145631068 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 835.2 506.74238477 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6305798724 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.6 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151677479673 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486612982164 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543559031136 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107929125062 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565514786056 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 78.4519038076 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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