If I can afford to buy a home or start a business, I will buy 100 percent a house. Others may be thinking that I make a wrong decision, but being pessimistic about starting a business will put me back. However, this is the best option for me.
First, buying a home is one of the biggest and most important priorities of starting a life. after I buy a home, I can spend my money on car and other important things and I don't have to worry about renting, that the owner of the house will get angry if I pay it late. Also, when I have my own house, I can easily change anything whenever I want. For example, When I made some money, the first thing I did was buy my dreamy house, but all my friends laughed at me and said if they had my place they would start a business, but I replied them, starting a business is a risky job, starting a business could bring more money to your life. Depending of the type of business, this could make increase the money that you already have or opposite, you lose everything you have. sometimes that may have not the favorable effect. As a result, some people go bankrupt and lose that little bit of money. But the house will be permanent and even it gets expensive.
Second, everyone starts a business and makes money, but at a young age, the only way to live independently is to buy a home so that they can get out of the family. I remember, When I got my bachelor's degree, I went to work and with all the money I had saved, I bought a small house near the city, and for a while I slowly completed the stuff in the house and closed my luggage and one day and I went to my own apartment.
In conclusion, although some people would prefer to start a business, I strongly prefer to buy a house, which will allow me to buy new necessary things. And also, I can live safely without any worry about rent payment.
- TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 90
- TPO-01 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay inorder to do so. A mandatory policy requiri 76
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- TOEFL essay:A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go a vacation or buy a car,you friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use . 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...on car and other important things and I dont have to worry about renting, that the o...
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...rst thing I did was buy my dreamy house, but all my friends laughed at me and sai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.17647058824 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35010833871 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498599439776 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0128383616 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204040697542 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682282980155 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699942577947 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113778478442 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661216333705 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.26 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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